改词扩句
——不改变原句的意思,仅通过词汇、语法手段使句子看起来更高级、地道。下面请看例子:
例1
Others think that the utilization of waste products will be eliminated sooner or later with the emergence of hi-te . However, I did not consider that factor carefully. Because I hold the view that waste materials can be made good use of to help reduce the living cost.
原句:I did not consider that factor carefully.
改句:I fail to take that factor into careful consideration.
【解析】
在这个简单句中,主要做了两个改变,一是把"did not"改成"fail to", 同样的意思,可是词汇应用的灵活度却大大提高。
二是把"consider…carefully"改成了"take sth into careful consideration",在考场作文中,词组的运用是个亮点,而且英语中静态居多(名词用的多),汉语中动态居多(动词用的多),在此把动词"consider"变成名词"consideration",顿时使英文更加地道。
例2
原句:
You are enthusiastic and enterprising. And you are one of the most talented and diligent in our department. You have already won 2 awards for good academic results.
改句:
You, enthusiastic and enterprising,are one of the most talented and diligent in our department,already winning 2 awards for outstanding academic results.
【解析】
我们可以看到例句中有3个简单句,咋看上去给人一种啰嗦、累赘的感觉。但细看之下,不难发现3个句子的主语全部是you,因此我们就该联想到同位语、插入语的应用。从改句中,我们可以发现谓语从原来的3个变成了1个,顿时使句子显得高级,精简很多。其次,还有一个改动之处为"good",这个词是常用词,口语中用的更频繁些,我们可以想一些同义词例如"excellent","outstanding"等等。
例3
原句:
In order to live a good life, it is becoming more and more important for people to learn knowledge well. Because in this modern world, knowledge is everything.
改句:
In order to live a happy(wonderful) life, it is becoming increasingly important for people to acquire knowledge well, for the reason that knowledge is everything in this modern world.
【解析】
首先我们看到原句中出现了more and more,在四六级作文中,它可算是常客,对阅卷老师而言,不具任何吸引力,而且有落入俗套的危险哦,所以在我们把它用一个简单的副词来替代,副词修饰形容词,相信会令人感觉眼前一亮。
其次,我们还要注意一个搭配问题,原句中的learn knowledge是明显的中式英语,很多同学会误用,正确的搭配应该是acquire knowledge。
最后,我们有余力可以把句子通过从句进行相连,使句子看起来更有结构感。