·         Ensure that the responses complete the application. The personal statement answers are an extension of your application. They should give new information, not repeat things you've already put in your application.

Tips for the longer responses

If you choose to write a longer response to one or both prompts (500 or more words), you will have a short essay of about six paragraphs. When reading your extended responses, readers will be looking for:

·         organization and clarity provided by a persuasive thesis, analytical topic sentences, and well-chosen examples.

Return to your Levels of Questions exercise to help guide you. Remember - the information you have decided to include to your thesis (Level Three questions), topic sentences (Level Two questions), and examples or details (Level One questions).

·         a response that supports - by clarifying and provide context for - the information in the application.

Your longer response is where you can make a persuasive argument for yourself. Make sure that it directly supports the information on your application.

The admissions readers will expect your longer response to contain a thesis that you will argue in the body of the essay. Here is a table that breaks down the different parts of a thesis, followed by some example theses for each prompt.

Structure of Thesis Statements

Activity: Write a thesis statement

You should now have chosen a question you will answer as your thesis statement. Using the samples above as a guide, write a thesis statement for your topic. Reread your thesis statement and ask yourself whether you followed the structure above.

Your Writing Process

Look at the process below. Do you follow all these steps when you write? If not, try to follow them as you're working on your personal statement.

1.    Brainstorm using levels of questions.

2.    Write a first draft.

3.    Get feedback. Give readers at least a week to respond.

4.    Revise for organization, clarity and meaning.

5.    Proofread your close-to-final draft to ensure there are no errors.

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